Snippet/blurb

[melissajm]

I debated whether or not I should post this, but I'm curious about the impression it makes. Since the "Demon Project" is now approaching novel length this would be a tiny fraction of the whole work, so I think it's Ok.

If I send it to DDP, I'm thinking of using this as the "short blurb" they ask for. Alternately/in addition, it could be an intro.

Anyone have comments?


Once, Mankind shared the world with other beings-the winged seraphim, servants of the Light and protectors of life, and the scaled demons, the Deeper Ones who considered all warm-bloods their rightful prey.
Once, a seraph decided to try to win the demons over to the Light.
A she-demon decided to play with her food.
And Malak was born.

Follow the story of the first demon/seraph hybrid through the eyes of mortals, seraphim and Malak himself, as The Demonspawn Chronicles unfold.

Comments

[mallory-blog.livejournal.com]

My initial feeling was that it is too vague, particularly the lines Once, A, And.

I also thought you could trim the first line a bit --

Once, Mankind shared the world with winged seraphim, servants of Light and protectors of life and scaled demons, ....

[melissajm.livejournal.com]

I'll have to go back to that once I actually finish the darn thing. ;)