I'd think, myself, and from not a huge experience with reading novels like this :D, that number 1. would be all right, actually. People have a fascination with being eaten (Jurassic Park), and like that feeling of being victims, mostly. I mean, within limits, but it's a sexy idea, if you see what I mean.
number 2. Yeah, I'm sorry to say. It's why I would be, well, I hope it's okay, but these things are religious. It would be like naming groups the Evangelicals and the Conservatives and then saying, but wait, there's nothing political here at all! (Or Liberals and Left-wingers, just to maintain political balance ;-D)
It's throwing out expectations and then not delivering. Or using words that aren't intended.
Ms. Bear was talking about this the other day, about how she couldn't use bosom in relating to a man, as in the man's bosom. That's waaaay smaller than this, do you think? I've been thinking about that observation, lately, which is why it struck me.
Anyway, as far as suggestions, well, can your seraphims and demons be called something else? I'd use Rogets International and myth books and see if you can find something there. One way that I made up beings was I took random letters: wsofhzug9rginbzoieghdlbnjgeggjhgtuibnlgg, and then looked through them to see if I could use a word. The b'Nlggs, for exmaple, or the Ginbzois :D.
Or not, you know, you'll work it out, no worries.
In the meantime, I'm sorry about the mixed reviews/opinions.
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number 2. Yeah, I'm sorry to say. It's why I would be, well, I hope it's okay, but these things are religious. It would be like naming groups the Evangelicals and the Conservatives and then saying, but wait, there's nothing political here at all! (Or Liberals and Left-wingers, just to maintain political balance ;-D)
It's throwing out expectations and then not delivering. Or using words that aren't intended.
Ms. Bear was talking about this the other day, about how she couldn't use bosom in relating to a man, as in the man's bosom. That's waaaay smaller than this, do you think? I've been thinking about that observation, lately, which is why it struck me.
Anyway, as far as suggestions, well, can your seraphims and demons be called something else? I'd use Rogets International and myth books and see if you can find something there. One way that I made up beings was I took random letters: wsofhzug9rginbzoieghdlbnjgeggjhgtuibnlgg, and then looked through them to see if I could use a word. The b'Nlggs, for exmaple, or the Ginbzois :D.
Or not, you know, you'll work it out, no worries.
In the meantime, I'm sorry about the mixed reviews/opinions.