*perks up ears* That sounds pretty interesting.

I like the content a lot but the 'once' element is not quite working for me yet. Should there be a 'once' in front of "A she-demon decided to play with her food." as well? I can see the last line would stay as is.
Maybe the other lines would work better not beginning with 'once', it made my eyes stumble over it a bit.

How about a synonym for once?

If you are worried about splashing your work all over the internet you could always f-lock the post.